Writing Group Participant (WGP): I noticed the commas in your poem.
Indy with a bit of a death rictus grin: What about my commas?
WGP: Well, you don’t need the one on line 6.
Indy to self: Probably not.
Indy to WGP: OK.
WGP: It’s a comma for a pause. And then I saw that you used only one other comma.
Indy to self: I see six other commas from where I’m sitting.
WGP: Oh, there’s another.
Indy to self: This is a second draft. And a writing group. [grits teeth]
WGP: William Carlos Williams once wrote an essay on commas in poetry.
Indy to self: Don’t get between me and my opinions on commas.
Indy to WGP: I’d like to read that.
WGP: Actually, most of these commas make sense. Just the one on line 6.
Indy: Mm-hm. Thank you. [pauses] Does my ending work?